i come to the water
more poem notes (or maybe an early, early draft of a poem) on this thursday...
I come to the water
to breathe in
salt,
hope,
shadows
I come to the water
to remember
her laughter
I come to the water
because I fear
forgetting
everything
I come to the water
to open
a space
inside me
I come to the water
to find
pieces of the past
I come to the water
to grieve
I come to the water
to let go
I come to the water
to seize life
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Reader Comments (12)
Soothing poetry - water is a healer and this piece exudes hope and healing. Nice images!
Liz--I love this piece!
Even though I have never been there, I recognized Cannon Beach thanks to a current Cannon Beach resident, Lisa Evans.
definitely not rough,,, and not exactly what i would call a draft... an eloquently executed piece.. fini
"because I fear/ forgetting/ everything" caught at me.
I like the way this poem remembers.
Like a prayer or a mantra. Lovely.
your writing is filled with beauty, insight and strength-I love this poem. here i am nestled in the mountains and i could still smell the salty air and hear waves crashing.
This is a beautiful poem - I think it's nice, as is. L
Wonderful words,
Peace to you, M
your repetition of the line "i come to the water" makes this feel like waves coming in in in at the beach. you'll definitely get a poem out of this!
This is beautiful as is....
XOXO
love you
I love your choice of salt first.
This choice, brought me to the water..to that place with you...so I could go on the journey.
nicely done.
liz this was truly beautiful!